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PW #412: Adult Romantic Suspense: PERMISSION TO FALL

Monday, 2 November 2015  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

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Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Name: Tamara Mataya
Mentee Name: Gracie West
Category: Adult
Genre: Romantic Suspense
Wordcount: 64,000


Tony inherited his father’s debt to a crime lord along with the family restaurant, and he’ll be damned if it goes down. He has no time for distractions—especially not the gorgeous little problem who recently opened a bookstore across the street.

Mara’s terrified thousands of miles and a squeaky-clean cover aren’t enough to lose the dealer whose money she stole for a fresh start. The sizzling-hot restaurateur makes her feel safe—unfamiliar territory she yearns to explore.

Undeniable cravings win. Soon they’re letting down their defenses…just as danger roars into town.


Tony squinted through a liquor-laced haze at the second set of books before him on the old mahogany desk and put his head in his hands. “This is my legacy?” All the whiskey in the world couldn’t replace his dad. “Is this why he died?”

“No. It looks like Finn’s uncle had something to do with the shooting, after all.” Alek took one hand from behind his head and examined his perfectly manicured nails. As if there weren’t already enough reasons to hate him right now, Tony added wears clear polish to the list. Under normal circumstances, Alek’s sheen didn’t bother him so much, but today, everything rankled. “We’re looking into it.”

Tony leaned back in the antique office chair, the one his dad had spun him on as a child, making him dizzy as the whiskey made him now. “And if I refuse to continue?”

Alek reached down and flipped to the last active page in both sets of books. “Look at the bottom line. You wanted to know how you’re going to take care of your mom and your three sisters?” He jabbed his finger on the page of the second book so hard it almost tore. “This is how.”


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  • Carrie Pestritto says:

    I’m intrigued! Please send the first 100 pages as a Word doc attachment to carrie@prospectagency.com, with the subject line “Pitch Wars Request.” Thank you and I look forward to reading more!

  • Suzie Townsend says:

    I’d love to see the query + full ms. You can send to suzie@newleafliterary.com

  • This sounds interesting, and I’d like to see more. If you’re interested at all, please send the first 50 pages (as a .doc) along with your query letter and a short synopsis (pasted in the body of the email) to submissions(at)jaw-litagent(dot)com with the subject line “Pitch Wars request: PERMISSION TO FALL”. Thanks so much, Julia

  • Rena Rossner says:

    I’d love to read more of this! Please send the first 50 pages attached as a word document to:



    Rena Rossner

  • Lane Heymont says:

    This sounds awesome! Please send the full ms and synopsis attached as .doc or .docx files to lane at theseymouragency dot com!

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