Manuscript Status: Finished
Mentor Name: Laura Salters
Mentee Name: Rebecca McLaughlin
Title: THE NAMELESS QUEEN
Word Count: 105,000
Coin is Nameless—no home, no family, no legal rights—but she’s just been named Queen.
If she finds her name, the Royals will fit her for a crown. If she fails, they’ll fit her for a noose.
And she’s not the only one searching.
RED QUEEN meets BOURNE IDENTITY.
I wake up the same way I fell asleep: knife in hand, boots for a pillow, and Nameless.
When I push away the heavy window shutter, a shiver runs up my arms. My shoulder aches from sleeping on my side, but that’s the best way to stay warm: small spaces and a candle flame. I pull on my boots, wiggling the numbness from my toes.
Curling my fingers into my threadbare sleeves, I leave behind the pungent puddles and uneven alley brickwork for the smoother cobblestone street bearing the morning foot traffic. Passersby shrug off yawns as vendors shout their prices. Two iron rings for a jar of dried apples. Three copper coins for a cut of a morning pastry.
The city of Seriden is waking up.
Ren waits for me at the corner. Most mornings, he trades our stolen coins for a breakfast of stale cornbread while I pick out bump-grab marks. The easiest are pudgy-faced Legals with leather purses flaunted at their waists, or flashy gems dangling past their stiff, starched collars.
Usually Ren leans against the dark bricks, staring out at the morning crowds, his shoulders even and strong, a small smile on his lips that I don’t think he notices.
Today, he’s fidgeting; shoulders pinched, fingers twitching. Never a good sign.
“Bad news?” I ask. Fresh air, sharp with ocean salt, chases away my morning lethargy.
He grabs my hand and pulls me back down the alley. So much for fresh air.
I need to find out what the bad news is! Please send over the first 100 pages to firstname.lastname@example.org. Put in your subject line Pitch Wars Request. I can’t wait to take a look!
Sounds fascinating! Please send the full manuscript to email@example.com, with Pitch Wars – Danielle in the subject line. Thanks!
I like this! I’m very intrigued. Do send the rest to firstname.lastname@example.org, with Pitch Wars in the subject heading.
I would love to take a look at this along with Danielle at NL — no need to resend, I can get the same copy that you sent the the query email — but excited to read!
I’m left hanging…I must know more! Please send the full manuscript to email@example.com. I can’t wait to read!
Amnesia and royal succession–two of my favorite things, and not unusually seen together 🙂 I’d love to see the full ms, please, as a PDF, sent to firstname.lastname@example.org with Pitch Wars and the title in the subject line. Looking forward to it!
This is right up my alley– I’m hooked!
Please send the full as an attached word document, with the pitch you used here pasted into the first page. Send it to QueryMandy@EmeraldCityLiterary.com
Emerald City Literary Agency
(Formerly D4EO Literary)
Woah. I’d be thrilled to read the full manuscript. Please send a Word document to email@example.com. Thanks!
Fantastic pitch! I’d love to have a look. I’m at firstname.lastname@example.org. Word attachments are most preferable if possible!
I’m hooked, and would love to keep reading! Please feel free to send along the query and full ms (as a word doc), to email@example.com. Thanks!
I’d love to take a look! Please send query (in the body of the email) with synopsis and full manuscript (attached as Word documents) to ESubmissions at SarahJaneFreymann.com. Please mention Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thank you!
Hi, Rebecca- I would love to read more of this! Please email the full to firstname.lastname@example.org as a Word doc, and be sure to put Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thanks!
Melissa Nasson, Esq.
Rubin Pfeffer Content, LLC
So I know Pete and Danielle have already requested this, but… I’d love to read it too! Send me the query + full ms at email@example.com 🙂
I’d love to read this full manuscript! Please send it attached as a word document to:
Wow, looks like I need to read this one fast. I’d like to see more! Please send a query + the full MS to leon@lperkinsagency (with Pitch Wars in the subject line), along with a one-sentence description of your book.
This is right up my alley! Please send a query (with #pitchwars in the title) as well as the first 100 pages to firstname.lastname@example.org!
I’d love to read more! Please send the first 100 pages in Word format and a query letter to email@example.com, and include “Stefanie Lieberman” in the subject line of the email. Thank you!
I’d love to read the full. Please send it along with the query to: furyqueries(at)thebentagency(dot)com
Include #pitchwars: (Title) in the subject line.
What an interesting premise!Please send the first 100 pages, query and synopsis to chquery[at]mcintoshandotis[dot]com and put “Pitch Wars request” in the subject line.
McIntosh & Otis, Inc.
I love this and definitely want to see more. Please send the query + synopsis + First 50 pages (I know the question always asked — you can go to the end of a chapter, but no more than 60 pages!) in one word doc to MFsubmissions [at] bookendsliterary.com with “PitchWars Request – THE NAMELESS QUEEN” as the subject. I can’t wait to take a look!
Hi Rebecca! I emailed you (a somewhat long-winded one with a whole backstory to the email listed on your website) but just in case, I would love to take a look at this! Please send along the full to Victoria@gelfmanschneider.com