PW #104: Adult Fantasy: THE PROTECTOR OF THE SEVERN

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor: Caitlin Sinead
Mentee: Luanne Smith
Title: THE PROTECTOR OF THE SEVERN
Category: Adult
Genre: Fantasy
Word Count: 106,000

Pitch:

When a treaty negotiation turns into an ambush, Protector Cira Conwy is forced to outrun assassins with her only surviving bodyguard, Lt. Ethan Daniels. While escaping across the Severn midlands—and falling hard for the lieutenant—Cira is blindsided by the reemergence of a weapon that could change the course of a brewing war. But when that same weapon threatens heartbreak, she’ll have to confront the demons in her past if she wants to change her future.

Excerpt:

I blew on each lens of the binoculars, then buffed them with the hem of my bloodstained shirt. A hairline crack in the glass distorted the view, yet I could still pick out the distant silhouette of a skulking Crau ship, should one approach. The horizon remained empty, but it wouldn’t stay that way for long.

Lt. Daniels cleared his throat. “They’ve finished loading the bodies onto the ships, Protector.”

I zoomed in on the time-eaten remains of a once prominent pier jutting out of the water. A pair of beach-rammers lolled in their wake as my men jumped off into the shallows, towropes in hand.

“Make sure they haul the ships past the breakers,” I said, lowering the binoculars. “I don’t want them washing up on shore before the bodies have been found.”

The lieutenant trudged through the sand, pointing seaward to the half-dozen rowboats. The oars hit the water, and the enemy ships heaved loose, sliding out to sea as silent as the souls they carried.

“You’re not one for subtlety, Cira, I’ll grant you that,” Will Gruffydd said.

I had launched a brutal message on the waves: thirty-eight bodies, greasy pickings for birds, set adrift to rot under a hot sun for their kinsmen to find. But I’d had enough of this game of raid-and-seek with the Crau.

 

8 comments to PW #104: Adult Fantasy: THE PROTECTOR OF THE SEVERN

  • Pam

    I’d like to see the query and the first 50 pages attached! pam@d4eo.com

  • Cira seems like not one to mess with! I’d love to see the full manuscript. Please send as a Word document to cmcdonald (at) maassagency (dot) com, along with the query and synopsis in the body of the email, and include “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. Thanks!

    Caitlin McDonald
    Donald Maass Literary Agency

  • I’d love to take a look! Can you send along the query (pasted into the body of the email) and the first 50 pages (attached as a .doc) when you have a moment to querylisa [at] awfulagent [dot] com? Also, please include Pitch Wars and the title in the subject line. Thanks!

  • lindsaymealing

    I’d love to read more! Please send your first 50 pages as a Word document to querylindsay@emeraldcityliterary.com. Can you please include “Pitch Wars” in the subject line and and also your query in the body of the email as well as pasted in the first page of the manuscript.

    Thanks!

  • Hi Luanne,

    I’d love to see this! Can you please send the full manuscript, as either a word document or PDF to victoria.queries@irenegoodman.com with “Query” and “Pitchwars” both included somewhere in the subject line?

    Thank you so much!

    Victoria

  • Margaret Bail

    Ooh. This sounds good. Please send the query and 1-2 page synopsis in the body of the email and the full manuscript as a Word attachment to margaret(at)inklingsliterary(dot)com. Be sure to include PITCH WARS in the subject line. Thanks! ~Margaret

  • Roseanne Wells

    Luanne–Great opening! Please send the manuscript and a synopsis as Word doc attachments to queryroseanne@gmail.com, with Query and Pitch Wars in the subject line. Can’t wait to read!

    Roseanne Wells
    The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency

  • I love these opening pages, and would love to see the full manuscript! Please send it along as a lword document to andrea [at] harveyklinger.com with “PitchWars Requested Manuscript” in the subject line. Thanks! I’m looking forward to reading.
    best,
    Andrea Somberg
    Harvey Klinger Inc.

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