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Rainy Day Blogfest

Tuesday, 24 August 2010  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

Christine at http://thewritershole.blogspot.com/ is hosting the Rainy Day Blogfest today. Check out the details and read the other participants’ entries listed here http://thewritershole.blogspot.com/2010/08/announcing-rainy-day-blogfest.html or in her own words…

I love rain. I love the way it sounds, the way it smells, the way it makes the air feel, the way it tastes on my tongue. Do you love rain, too? Or do rainy days get you down? Does rain interfere with your outdoor plans? Or make commuting horrible? Or inspire you to write poetic verses about the heavens weeping o’er the fields?


What about your characters? How does rain affect them?


Here’s my entry:

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Filed: Misc

20 Comments
  • Francine says:

    Hi

    Certainly wet, windy, ghastly weather. Loved the “interaction” between characters – the overall wet conditions adding to unneasy atmoshere!
    best
    F

  • stu says:

    I like the way the characters work, and the dialogue. I think perhaps the description at the start is a little overwritten, though that may just be a matter of personal taste.

  • an “i love you” and an argument in the rain. good stuff. makes me want to read more.

  • Summer Ross says:

    oh nice clencher ending. I want to turn the page LOL my favorite line: “inhaling the wet dust of the streets.” its not one description that is seen often as a sense type. thanks for posting.

  • Storms inside the heart and outside the body. Those usually spell trouble for everyone involved. You swept us into the narrative, hoping for the survival of the friendships as well as the lives involved. Bravo.

  • E. Arroyo says:

    Nice. I like the voice in this. Love is always a touchy thing. LOL Good job!

  • Rainy here lol! Greay scene and character interaction. Nice job!!!

  • Good stuff. Didn’t feel like the rain was decoration; your description of it really helped place me in the moment. Well staged, and involving character interaction.

  • Nicely written, fluid. One of the best uses of actual “rain”. Love, arguing, and something looming. Nice.

  • Intriguing story. I love how the weather is wild as they argue and talk about love and possible danger. Super scene! 🙂

  • I love how the scene falls from the normal–friends running out into the rain, arguing–and then to the other worldly. Very cool. I love it when the abnormal is neighbors with the everyday moments.

    I would love to know more. great job!

  • VR Barkowski says:

    Excellent narrative and I loved the cliffhanger ending and the move to the supernatural. Definitely makes me want to read more. Also, you’ve done an outstanding job of choreographing the scene. When you have that many characters on the stage, it’s not easy to keep them straight for the reader. But the voices here ring clear and true. Very well done!

  • Ju Dimello says:

    A guy with dimples? Love that 😉

    I also liked the fact that one of them really did stay alert among all the tension.

    “This very moment you’re leaving a trail, and there’s nothing I can do to stop it.” !!

  • Fun, fun voice! I also loved how he flashed his “guy dimples”. The humor seemed very natural.

    -Mercedes

  • Donna Hole says:

    I’m with Arik; rain – even rainstorms – can be refreshing.

    He sounds like an elemental. And this sounds like an intriguing novel.

    You did well keeping the rain in the center of all the action.

    …….dhole

  • Brenda Drake says:

    Thanks for all the comments. I really enjoyed reading all the participants’ scenes. I have to say this blog had a lot of great writers. You all rock! 😀

  • Brenda Drake says:

    I meant this blogfest had a lot of great writers!!!

  • Dawn Embers says:

    Great blogfest entry. The rain was a good element and I like how the main character’s coverage from it is described. The argument does make things interesting. By the end I was wondering what part of the story I’ve missed because you have my attention and I want to know what’s going on. 🙂

  • roh morgon says:

    Sorry I’m so late to comment. I tried to yesterday, but blogger kept eating my words!

    Anyhow, really love the interplay with the umbrellas and the rain.

    And Arik? Yeah, I want to know more!

    BTW – visited your Library Jumpers site – what a cool story!

  • Very intriguing entry, especially the last paragraph on ‘entering’ a book. What a cool concept! Certainly a great rainy day scene. Umbrellas in Boston, shields and warriors, got me a bit confused as to where exactly the story was set, but it does sound like an awesome story!

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