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PW #339: Young Adult Science Fiction: DONOR

Friday, 4 November 2016  |  Posted by Nikki Roberti

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor: Brian Palmer
Mentee: Adalyn Grace
Title: DONOR
Category: Young Adult
Genre: Science Fiction
Word Count: 82,000


Analeigh has been gifted a new set of eyes by the Donor Center, a corporation that breeds and supplies human-like organ donors.

Black is a donor who’s been raised on a lie: the Center releases its patients on their eighteenth birthday.

When the two discover Donor is more sinister than anyone dreamed, they must team up to expose its dark truths before Black is harvested for the next buyer. 



I couldn’t listen to the constant drumming of the Operator’s fingertips against the limousine’s leather seats any longer. The man sat curled in a corner, his beady eyes observing the faces of the four remaining passengers without blinking. He scrutinized each of us, though his stare held mine longer than necessary.

“While you will be spending nearly a month in their presence,” he said, “remember that no bonds should be formed with the patients. Despite their appearance, the patients are far from human. They exist for one purpose alone.” Each word was enunciated like a sentence. I glanced at my father, knowing he wouldn’t appreciate being treated like he was unforgivably inept.

“I assure you, that will not be an issue.” My father’s voice cut through the air like a whip. “We are well informed on the patients. I am, after all, one reason Donor exists in this capacity, Charles. And don’t forget my wife’s work here is the other reason.” He spoke with the obnoxious sort of pride he liked to use when attempting to sound official. Every time I heard it, I gagged a little.

Charles, the Operator, gave a meek nod as his tiny body wilted into itself. “Of course, Mayor Hampton. My apologies.” His fingers never stopped tapping. 

Why, I wondered, was he worried about us meeting the patients?

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  • Jim McCarthy says:

    I’d love to take a look. Please send the manuscript along to jmccarthy@dystel.com. Thanks!

  • Caitie Flum says:

    I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript. Please send it as a word attachment to querycaitie (at) lizadawson (dot) com with your query in the email, with the PitchWars request in the subject.

  • Laura says:

    Sounds awesome! Could you send me the official query in the body of an email, the first 50 pages in an attached Word doc, and “Pitch Wars Request” in the subject line to laura(at)triadaus(dot)com? Thanks!

    –Laura Crockett, TriadaUS Literary Agency

  • Lisa Rodgers says:

    I’d love to take a look! Please send the first 50 pages (.doc attachment) and your query letter (pasted into the body of the email) to querylisa [at] awfulagent [dot] com. Thanks!

  • Penelope Burns says:

    Hi Adalyn! I’m absolutely loving this. Can you please send the full and your query to penelope.gsliterary@gmail.com with “Pitch Wars” in the subject line? Thanks so much!

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