Manuscript Status: Finished
Mentor Name: Kristin Wright
Mentee Name: Jennifer Camiccia
Title: LISTEN
Category: Young Adult
Genre: Contemporary
Word Count: 73,000
Pitch:
After seventeen-year-old Emmaline’s unstable stepfather drives the family straight off a cliff, her anxiety kills the one thing she can trust – her voice. Worse, the crash destroys her sister’s health. Emmaline must find the courage to sing again for a huge competition’s prize money, or Birdy may never recover.
Excerpt:
The digital clock on the car dashboard mesmerizes me, as if knowing the exact minute I die will change anything. Our family drive has darkened and twisted as fast as Hank’s mood.
I imagine my obituary: At 5:43 pm seventeen-year-old Emmaline Frazier’s young life was cut short in a tragic car accident. She is survived by her mother, Justine, and younger sister, Birdy.
Each minute ticks by with a kind of finality.
5:44
He hugs the curves, swerving dangerously close to the sheer drop where only a flimsy, metal barrier stands between us and the Pacific Ocean. Each second I survive is a victory against my stepfather. Instead of screaming, I bite the inside of my cheek, pinch the skin along my thighs, and keep my mouth shut.
5:45
I consider opening the door and jumping, but Birdy clings to my hand and I can’t leave her alone. I don’t tell her it will be okay, because I may be a crap sister, but I can’t lie to her. My silence is one of self-preservation. I’ve learned it does no good to sob and beg for our lives. It only feeds his instability. Our tears and fear – the anti-lithium.
5:46
The back end of our Honda Civic smacks the barrier with a dull thud: our car fishtails into traffic, cars honking, people swearing. Hank occasionally strokes the thick blonde waves of Mom’s hair, smiling at her, seemingly blind to her terror.
He blows her a kiss. “Love you, babe.”
I’d love to read more of this! Please send the full manuscript to me as an attached word doc: querymandy@emeraldcityliterary.com. Thanks so much!
-M
I’d love take a look at the full manuscript. Please feel free to send it along as a word document to andrea [at] harveyklinger.com with “PitchWars Requested Manuscript” in the subject line. Thanks! I’m looking forward to reading.
best,
Andrea Somberg
Harvey Klinger Inc.
This sounds interesting! Please send the full manuscript to stacey@donaghyliterary.com as a word attachment with your query in the body of the email. Use email subject #PitchWars- TITLE -YA Contemporary
Oh wow, I’m intrigued!! Please feel free to send the first 50 pages along with query, synopsis and chapter summaries to nicole [at] goldenwheatliterary [dot] com.
Thanks!
Nicole