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PW-24 (YA): ONLY IN MY DREAMS

Tuesday, 21 January 2014  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

MENTOR: Jessie Humphries

MENTEE: Andy Hertzenberg

TITLE: ONLY IN MY DREAMS

CATEGORY/GENRE: YA Contemporary

WORD COUNT: 55,000

 

PITCH:

When fangirl Olivia Davis saves Hollywood hunk Kit Taylor’s life it should have been a good thing. Except that he ends up in coma, his family mistakes her for his girlfriend, and despite best intentions, she gets tangled up in a messy web of lies that is bound to break more than one heart.

 

EXCERPT:

In my seventeen years I’ve been to Paris, Tokyo, and Egypt. I’ve walked the streets of Victorian London, visited the underwater world of Atlantis, and survived at least four versions of a dystopian outer space. That’s me, Olivia Davis, time traveling jet setter.

Or, you know part-time employee at Universal Studios.

But the last time I was in the Hollywood Hospital I was seven, and didn’t know what was going on. I don’t remember the waiting room being this jam-packed. In fact, I think Gran and I were the only people here. This time there’s hardly room for me to elbow my way through to the nursing station. In a sliver of space between two reporters I spot an opening.

“Excuse me,” I say, pushing past them.

Even their dirty looks can’t slow me down. Not that anything would stop me. Kit’s in the back somewhere, and I have to know if he’s okay. Last I saw of him he was unconscious getting loaded into an ambulance. They would have woken him up by now, right?  He has to be okay. He’s a celebrity. They wouldn’t let him die. Then again they’re not supposed to let anyone die. It’s not like he’s super human.

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