Manuscript Status: Finished
Mentor: G.K. Byrne
Mentee: Elliot Smith
Title: THE MIDNIGHT FLIGHT OF THE SALEM MAGI
Category/Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
Word Count: 57,000
Twins, Ark and Swanette, are descendants of the Salem witches. While they admit to causing their share of magical calamities, being chased by the king’s witch hunters seems like an overreaction. When dragons join the hunt, the twins must ally with Abigail Adams, Boston’s Witch-In-Chief, to save the patriots, and themselves. MAGYK meets the American Revolution in this secret history of Paul Revere’s ride.
At dusk I’ll burn at the stake. I don’t like to brag, but I’m a prodigy at it. This will be my third time. It’s made me something of a celebrity around New England. While burning witches and wizards has always attracted large crowds, I think I’ve taken the spectacle to a new level.
Lured by my reputation, the villagers have packed the town square despite the short notice. Every person nearby must have come to find out if I can truly survive being burned alive.
Thank goodness. If everyone is watching me, no one is searching for my family.
My relief shrivels with the arrival of the Committee for Public Safety. The members call themselves deacons, but my family has another name for them: witch hunters. Their procession snakes through the crowd, torches lifted high in the looming darkness.
As they approach, I rattle my chains. “Wait. Wait.”
“Too late, guttersnipe,” says a torchbearer. “Third time’s the charm.”
I shiver. There’s no way to know how many lives I have left, but even if I’ve run out, I have to distract them until my sister signals. “Please, I only seek a small mercy.”
The torchbearer checks his pocket watch. “If it will shut you up.”
Choosing my words with care, I look to the expectant crowd. “Excuse me. Did any of you bring marshmallows? I’m afraid I might starve to death.”
Would love to see the full! Can you please send the full ms, along with the query + 10 pages pasted in the body of the email, with subject line: PITCH WARS + Title.
Thank you! 🙂
Hi Elliot–I love twin stories, and the bit of humor at the end is great. Please send the manuscript and a synopsis as Word doc attachments to firstname.lastname@example.org with Query and Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thanks!
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Ninja request! This sounds like the perfect blend of history and magic. Please send the query, synopsis, and first 50 pages to email@example.com. I look forward to reading it!
Great excerpt. Curious to read more! Please send a query with the first 3 chapters to firstname.lastname@example.org with ‘Pitch Wars’ in the subject line.