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PW #148: Adult Science Fiction: PIRATE

Tuesday, 31 October 2017  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Names: Dan Koboldt and Michael Mammay

Mentee Name: Ryan McLeod


Category: Adult

Genre: Science Fiction

Word Count: 95,000 words


Space pirate Michael Jackson (no relation) takes on a job delivering the ransom for the captured leader of the rebellion. After all, a man has to pay the bills, even if he doesn’t love the politics. Unfortunately, the client is Jackson’s ex. Worse, she stole his payment from a fanatical warlord who’s now hunting her.


Five hundred people are watching me. Half of them are softly crying, men and women alike. The rest have all slipped into detached, thousand-yard stares. Lights on, no one home. It creeps the hell out of me.

I have them, the passengers of the luxury cruise-liner Oblique, seated neatly in their gilded Main Concourse. My gunner, Magnus Glint, stands over them like a prison guard watching a chain gang. He holds his rifle at the ready and has a glorious fucking-try-me expression. The irony of these First Worlders being treated like common, worthless criminals isn’t lost on me. I’d laugh, but that’d probably send them right over the edge.

Magnus’ rifle is an unsettling bit of hardware though; a zero G recoilless rifle, plasma and slug throwing options. It can punch through thirty centimetres of polysteel and through nearly a metre of plasticrete–Lord knows what it would do to a body. I imagine exploding watermelons when I think about it. I try to not think about it.

Five hundred people are a lot to watch, and I’m beginning to think I should have hired more crew for this job, another ten probably. I’d balked at the idea though. Greed is why. That, and maybe naive stupidity, thinking we could handle it.

“Just about ready, Clay?” I ask.

My quartermaster, Clayton Connell, hunches over the display on the metre and a half cube I had him dolly into this little party of ours.

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  • Sam Morgan says:

    Sounds like something for me. I’d love to read more. Could you please send me the first three chapters in a .doc to smorgan at foundrymedia dot com with the subject line “Pitch Wars VI: Return of the Pitch”

  • Ummm yes please. I’d love to see your query in the body of an email, along with the full manuscript and a synopsis (both attached). Please also include a link to this entry. You can send your materials to lauren@triadaus.com. I look forward to reading!


  • Erik Hane says:

    This sounds great! Could you send your query in the body of an email and a full manuscript attached? Can’t wait to dive in. Thanks for sending along.

  • I’d love to see more! Can you please send your first 50 pages to querylindsay@emeraldcityliterary.com. Please include your query in your email and Pitch Wars in the subject line.


  • Rena says:

    I’d love to read this full manuscript! Please send attached as a word document to: rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com.


    – Rena

  • Roseanne Wells says:

    I’d love to take a look! Please use the guidelines on jdlit.com to send 30 pp (instead of the usual 20) and put #pitchwars in the subject line. I can’t wait to read more!

    Roseanne Wells
    The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency

  • I would love to read this! Please feel free to send the full manuscript along to andrea@harveyklinger.com with Pitch Wars Request in the subject line. Thanks! -Andrea

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