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PW #117: Adult Science Fiction: SUBJECT ONE

Tuesday, 31 October 2017  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Name: J.C. Nelson

Mentee Name: Gina Urso


Category: Adult

Genre: Science Fiction

Word Count: 85,000 words


Amar is the government’s leading regeneration expert, working deep underground on a top-secret military experiment: The Origin Project. After surviving death at the hands of extremists, she now defies it, crafting new lives out of old bodies to create the perfect soldier. But while Amar searches for clues to her missing past, she discovers harvesting body parts is a far more murderous business than the government lets on, and her family of creations is in danger. To save them, she must uncover secrets of the project’s ill-fated Subject One and walk a fine line separating man, woman, and monster.


Every knot must be perfect. Size, spacing. It’s all critical to the outcome. Extra skin is carved away so fresh edges marry with precision. Too much and it scars. Too little, gaping wounds. The tissue must touch gently, innocently, like a lover’s first kiss.

Expertly seamed patches of flesh join a human tapestry of blanched peach, rich cyan and dusty rose. My palette. The colors of life in transition.

Every tick of the oversized clock on the back wall taunts me. My eyes flit like a hummingbird to find each tear, every defect. Hands, tested by time and fate, make the broken whole again. I alone create new life from remnants of death. This job requires the delicacy and artistry only a woman’s small hands can provide. Despite the nine-hour surgery, I’m alert, heart sprinting at the thought of what comes next.

Breath even, fingers nimble, the clear floss loops and twirls. The bronze tip of the fish hook needle does a graceful pirouette around the taut line to secure the sutures. Snip. Done at last! Taking a step back, I admire my work, pulse thrumming at her exquisite beauty. Time to see what lies behind those closed eyes.



  • Sam Morgan says:

    Sounds awesome. I’d love to read more. Could you please send me the first three chapters in a .doc to smorgan at foundrymedia dot com with the subject line “Pitch Wars VI: Return of the Pitch”

  • Kaitlyn Johnson says:

    I’d love to see more of this! Could you please send your first 100 pages to https://querymanager.com/query/KaitlynJohnson/Contests with PitchWars in referral box. Looking forward to the read!

  • I’d love to see more! Can you please send your first 50 pages to querylindsay@emeraldcityliterary.com. Please include your query in your email and Pitch Wars in the subject line.


  • Roseanne Wells says:

    I’d love to take a look! Please use the guidelines on jdlit.com to send 30 pp (instead of the usual 20) and put #pitchwars in the subject line. I can’t wait to read more!

    Roseanne Wells
    The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency

  • I’m so in love with your voice! I love the idea of not only creating soldiers from body parts but also growing attached to them and wanting to save them. 🙂

    Please send the full manuscript to Lynnette@theseymouragency.com, attached as a Word document with the query as the first page. Put “Pitch Wars” and your title in the subject line. Please also include a brief synopsis as a separate document. Thanks! Can’t wait to read!

    Lynnette Novak
    The Seymour Agency

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