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Friday, 6 September 2013  |  Posted by Brenda Drake
Genre: MG Sci-fi/Adventure
Word Count: 44,000
Candies from an Alien Pez Dispenser give eleven-year-old Mike temporary superpowers, but only his inner superhero can save himself and his friends from a four-armed, snout-faced alien wielding the Interstellar Remote Control of Everything.
Mike stuffed his Space Camp application into his Tweety Bird backpack. Tweety would never be as cool as The Avenger’s Hawkeye, no matter what Mom said. He scowled at his crumpled “C-” history quiz. History sucked almost as bad as Thursdays.
Ignoring Mr. Jenkins’ final words, Mike flung the half-closed pack over his shoulder and sprinted from the classroom before the bell finished ringing. He burst through the front doors and dashed toward the community park.
Chest heaving, Mike slipped into the woods. He skidded down a bank covered with last year’s leaves and plunked onto a half-rotted log behind a massive oak tree. Little stones followed him and splashed into a puddle. Even the ripples laughed at him for running away.
Hiding like a wimp sucked, but it was safer than being found by Brutus and his gang. The fart-face sixth-grader kept The List of Chumps to Be Pounded After School and today was hang-Mike-like-a-piñata Thursday.
If his application was accepted, he’d be on his way to Space Camp in two months. The only place safer would be outer space.
After the science-fair judge labeled his zero-gravity omelet-maker as brilliant and called Mike the next Einstein, Brutus chanted Afro-Einstein for weeks. Which made no sense since his close-cropped hair looked nothing like Einstein’s I-stuck-my-finger-in-a-socket look.
The pool stilled into a mirror. A shadow loomed over Mike’s watery reflection. He leapt to his feet—right into the puddle—ready to block Brutus with his backpack.
Except it wasn’t Brutus.

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  • Kim says:

    So I’m here to leave you a little love. <3
    I want you to know that Brenda and I fought for this pitch. We begged and bartered are souls to get you back from another team. I don’t know if you’re on twitter, but I also tweeted about your pitch when I was going through the slush…something along the lines of how I loved Space Camp!

    We’re confident you’ll find the right agent for this fantastic story.

  • GSMarlene says:

    Thanks Kim and Brenda! I just got some feedback from an agent that requested a query from a WriteOnCon twitter pitch that my opening is a little rushed. I can see that and have already worked a new opening from a scene I regretfully cut and I think it will work out. I will find that agent! Thanks so much for all your work and the opportunities you provide for us writers!

  • This sounds like something my son would love! Best of luck with it. 🙂

  • This is just so dang fun! Glad you’ve gotten some good feedback and feel you can make an already awesome story even better!

  • SM Johnston says:

    I had this on my list as I struggle to find MG that my 8yo son and I want to read together. I thought this one would’ve been perfect. It was on my draft list. Sorry there were no bids 🙁

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