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My week in the Dark

Monday, 29 March 2010  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

Okay, today’s coffee is Starbuck’s Dark Cherry Mocha (nonfat milk of course).  I have to say it’s not bad, but I’m a caramel fan.  Anyway, I sat watching the Monday morning crowd and a vision impaired man walked by.  He ordered his coffee and found a seat (more graceful than me, I must add).  It got me thinking about being blind after the PRK procedure on my eyes.  For one week, I was laid up in bed, in the dark, listening to audio books.

I’m not a fan of audio books.  I like to hold the book and hear my own idea of what each person sounds like.  However, I have to admit, I did enjoy listening to Inkheart by Cornelia Funke and read by Lynn Redgrave.  Lynn Redgrave’s read was so entertaining and fun I didn’t mind being stuck in bed all day and night listening to how wonderful she brought the characters to life.

So as I burrowed into the covers, waiting for my eyes to heal, I thought about dialogue in my novel.  Imagine how Lynn Redgrave would have brought the voices to life in front of a recording mic.  I’ve seen actors do it before on specials that show how they record voices.  They act out the characters actions and emotions as they read the dialogue.  We too should act out our characters as we write.  Of course, I don’t think it would be wise to do that right here in Starbuck’s.  It should be done in privacy where you won’t feel self conscious or be hauled off to the mental hospital.

I’ve always read my story out loud as I typed to make sure it sounded good, but now I throw emotion behind it and act out what my characters are doing to get it right.  I’m lucky to be by myself all day without an audience.  Anyway, go into a room alone and get to know your characters better.  It might surprise you how wonderful you’ve created one, or you may find one character is flat.  It’s better to find out now, then to have an agent say your pages didn’t pull them in enough.

That’s it.  Slurp!

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  • DaniSue says:

    Never had a dark cherry mocha, I’m a white chocolate girl myself. I’m not a fan of audio books either. I try to read my writing out loud, but I end up feeling silly. I guess I should give it another try, although my cat and my dog will definitely still look at me like I’m crazy.

  • Good advice! I read aloud for errors, but putting emotion behind it would find character weaknesses, too.

  • acting it out…oh boy I would have to make sure my doors are locked lol! I think that is a great idea!

    Glad you are feeling better 🙂

  • Brenda Drake says:

    Danisue – White chocolate is all the craze in my home. I do get a hiss from the cats once in awhile especially when I’m growling.

    Deb-It really does help to point out weaknesses.

    Kerri-LOL You’d only have to lock the doors? I draw the curtains and shut the blinds.

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