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Wednesday, 15 March 2017  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

Ice Cream Cones


Age Category: Middle Grade

Genre: Fantasy #ownvoices POC

Word Count: 39,000


A young girl tasked with helping souls from a Louisiana cemetery pass to the other side must fight a powerful witch for control over the gate to the underworld.

First 250 Word of Manuscript:

If you ever saw Geraldine Grey, the first thing you’d notice, she was a very serious child. At twelve, she had already mastered the stern calmness of a professor, despite the fact she was at that awkward age of pointy elbows and knobby knees. She had curly black hair, a small snub of a nose, and a sharp, determined chin. Her most important features, however, were her eyes, which were eerie white, except for the faint black ring lining her pupils.

Geraldine’s eyes were important, because they allowed her to see ghosts.

Bonsoir, Mister Thompson,” Geraldine greeted the groundskeeper when she arrived at the quiet, tree-lined graveyard that evening.

The bad-tempered ghost did not agree with this salutation. “I don’t see what’s so good about it.” He rose from his grave and stretched, his old bones rattling from the movement. Mister Thompson was as gaunt and bony in death as he had been in life.

The fact that his bones rattled did not startle Geraldine. At La Maison des Fantômes, that grand, ancient mansion in the backwoods of Louisiana, which housed the oldest cemetery in the state, ghosts became so powerful they could do all sorts of strange things. That included moving their skeletons when they felt like it.

Gabriel, a white wolf with bright blue eyes, trotted up to Geraldine. You’d think he’d lighten up just once, Gabriel’s thoughts whispered in Geraldine’s mind. Most people mistook Gabriel for a husky, or an Alaskan Mamalute, but he was one-hundred percent Siberian direwolf.




Filed: Pitch Madness

  • renarossner says:

    I’d love to take a look at this! You get a Gumdrop Pass!
    Please Query + 1st 50 pages attached as a word document to: rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com

  • Absolutely loved this! Candy Castle: I want to see the full! Please send as word doc along w a full 1-2 page, single spaced synopsis to thao@dijkstraagency.com w #pitchmadness and your title in the subject line. 🙂

  • I’d love to read this as I go down Gumdrop Pass! Please send the first 50 pages, query and synopsis to chquery [at] mcintoshandotis [dot] com with Pitch Madness request in the subject line.

  • Peter Knapp says:

    Request to take the Cherry Pitfalls. I’d love to take a second look at this! Please send the query and the first 100 pages (attached as a Word document) to queries [at] parkliterary [dot] com. Please paste the query into both the body of the email and the first page of the Word document. Put “Pete Knapp – Pitch Madness” in the subject line.

  • Laura Biagi says:

    I will take a Gumdrop Pass! (Query + 1st 50 pages) Please email LBiagi@jvnla.com with the material as an attachment and Pitch Madness in the subject line. If you’re able to include a synopsis as well, that would be awesome. Can’t wait to read more!

  • Kari Sutherland says:

    Intriguing! Sounds cool. Candy Castle, please! (Please send me the full ms plus your query/synopsis: kari@bradfordlit.com)

  • I’d love to read more! Please pass the gumdrop and send your query, first 50 pages, and synopsis in the email body to whitley[at]inklingsliterary[dot]com. Thanks!

  • Blair Wilson says:

    Request to take the Cherry Pitfalls! Please send the query and the first 100 pages (attached as a Word document) to queries [at] parkliterary [dot] com. Please paste the query into both the body of the email and the first page of the Word document. Put “Blair Wilson – Pitch Madness” in the subject line.

  • Ooh! Candy Castle for me! I would love to see the query and full manuscript. Please feel free to send them to me at lara@andreabrownlit.com with “Requested: PitMad” in the subject line. Thank you!

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