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46. THE FROST KING – Young Adult Fantasy

Monday, 3 November 2014  |  Posted by Brenda Drake

Assorted_Uzi_Water_Guns_lgMentor Name: Sarah Nicolas

Mentee Name: Elly Takaki


Category: Young Adult

Genre: Fantasy

Word Count: 80,000


Ruby is one of the last Firebloods in a land ruled by Frost. To save the kingdom from an ancient curse, she must ally with her enemies, control the Fire within her, and sacrifice the boy she loves.


Ice cracked like the breaking of bones.

Frost swept the prison in a white wave, crusting over stone walls and insinuating itself into cracks and keyholes. It spilled across the floor and hardened into glittering sheets that stopped inches away, leaving me huddled on an island of bare stone.

Booted feet scraped to a halt outside my cell. A hooded figure hulked there, lit by a torch on the wall behind.

My spine tightened, fine hairs rising against my neck. But executioners did not smell of oiled leather and soap. Nor did guards.

A smaller hooded shape joined the first, leaning on a walking stick that tapped with each step.

“And you think this is the one?” His voice was pitched low, his accent high-born.

“Look,” said the taller figure, his voice deeper, more vigorous. “See how the ice refuses to touch her?”

He sucked in a breath and blew it out with force. The water in the air turned to ice and fell over me in tiny pellets that steamed back into vapor as they touched my skin. I stiffened and bit off a moan, unwilling to add to their sport. Watching me steam was one of the guards’ favorite tricks.

“Sit up, little one,” the shorter figure said, tapping the bars with his stick as if knocking at my door.

I remained still, the silence shattered by a low moan from another cell.

“Do as he says,” said the lower voice, “or I will find a bucket of water and then we’ll see how you shiver.”

Filed: Pitch Wars

  • Ammi-Joan Paquette says:

    Would love to see more of this – send first 3 chaps please!

  • Jaida Temperly says:

    Hi Elly,
    I’d love to read more! Please send the first 50 pgs. to query[at]newleafliterary[dot]com, with the subject line: Pitch Wars Request – Jaida.

  • Hi Elly, I’m intrigued by this premise, and the opening definitely grabbed me! Please email me your query, first 50 pages, and a synopsis (if available) to brooks(at)thebentagency(dot)com, with the subject line “Pitch Wars Request: THE FROST KING.” If you have any questions, just let me know. Looking forward to reading more! Cheers, Brooks

  • Stefanie Lieberman says:

    I’d really like to see more of this one! Please send the query, synopsis and first ten pages to submissions(at)janklow(dot)com. In the subject line of your email, please type: For Stefanie Lieberman – PITCH WARS REQUEST

  • Amanda Panitch says:

    Hi Elly! I’d love to read more! Please send your first 100 pages to me as a Word document at amanda[at]LMQlit[dot]com.

  • Thao Le says:

    Hi Elly,
    I’m definitely intrigued and would love to read more. Could you please send me the first 50 pages as a word doc attachment to: thao(at)dijkstraagency(dot)com? Please also include a query letter, complete synopsis and a short bio in the email and have “PitchWars Request: THE FROST KING” in your subject line. Looking forward to hearing from you!

  • Lara Perkins says:

    Hi Elly,

    I’m intrigued! I’d love to see more. Please feel free to send a query and the first 50 pages (as a word or pdf attachment) to lara@andreabrownlit.com and please write “Pitch Wars Request: The Frost King” in your subject line. Thanks!

  • Jackie Lindert says:

    Hi Elly–this sounds great! I’d love to see more. Could you please send your first 100 pages and synopsis to query@newleafliterary.com as an attachment, with the subject line “Pitch Wars Request–Jackie”? Thanks!

  • Peter Knapp says:

    I love this premise. Please send a query letter with the first 100 pages attached to queries (at) parkliterary (dot) com. Please put “Peter Knapp: Pitch Wars Request” in the subject.
    Looking forward to reading!
    Pete Knapp
    The Park Literary Group

  • Rachel Brooks says:

    I’d love to read more! Please send the query plus the full manuscript as a word doc attachment to rachel(at)lperkinsagency(dot)com with “Pitch Wars Request: Title” in the subject line. Thanks!

  • Laura Cummings says:

    Hi Elly,

    Well, you had me hooked with the very first sentence. I love both the premise and style of this, and I’d appreciate a chance to read more. Could you please send your query letter, synopsis, and first 10 pages to querylaurie(at)fuseliterary(dot)com? Please make sure to include the subject “Pitch Wars: THE FROST KING” so I remember to give this priority. And to clarify, I am Laurie McLean’s assistant and am requesting this on her behalf, so go ahead and address the materials to her.

    Thank you so much!
    Laura Cummings

  • Rena Rossner says:

    Hi Elly!

    I’d love to read the first 50 pages. Can you send them attached as word document to: rena(at)thedeborahharrisagency(dot)com – and please reference PITCHWARS in the subject line.


    – Rena

  • Lana Popovic says:

    Hi Elly,

    This sounds BEAUTIFUL. Could I see the full ms, please, as a PDF? To lana@chalbergsussman.com, along with a synopsis and “PitchWars: THE FROST KING” in the subject line.

    All my best,

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